ASK & DISCUSS INDEX

5 years ago - Roberto Sommella

I was curious about the video and wanted to give advice, but you posted no link. Are you sharing it privately? It could be interesting to read other's comments as well and create a discussion.

5 years ago - Matthias Sundberg

I mean, I guess I can share it here. It's a private video on Vimeo, simply because the musician hasn't seen this version yet. But sure I can pop it in here in an edit of the post.

5 years ago - Paul W Franklin

Overall it flows fine, although could do with being a bit snappier on the actions/reactions between characters.
But my main note would be the intro. It's about 40s too long, has no music and doesn't add anything. Cut that and put the credits at the end.

5 years ago - Roberto Sommella

watched it. very nice! I really like the idea and the making. congrats.

for improvements: I agree with Paul's comments. In truth, I'd say that credits are not really necessary, but if you want to put them in, like Paul says, better at the end, and for sure faster, like literally a split second.

I would just keep the title and have the music started before the first image - if you follow the advice about a snappier edit, you can maybe manage to squeeze the intro as well in the song itself so you don't need to cut it altogether. especially the beginning can be told in a more immediate way.

again, congrats for the ideas and break a leg.

5 years ago - Matthias Sundberg

Guys, thank you so much! This is definitely helpful. Probably things I was leaning towards, but needed someone else to say, too.

Thank you!