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Kai Langford-Do

4 months, 1 week ago - Kai Langford-Do

Hello,

I am currently working on a short film script, 'Part-Time Lovers' and am looking for some feedback as we move closer towards production. Specifically, I'm concerned that I haven't fleshed out the female character enough. It's really important I get this right and would greatly appreciate some help with this!

Logline: In a taxi to the airport, an insecure young man wants to find out what’s bothering his on-again, off-again girlfriend; frustrations and regrets arise as harsh truths threaten to destroy what’s left of their relationship.

If you're interested in lending a hand, don't hesitate to get in touch.

Thanks,
Kai

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nathalie reiner

4 months ago - nathalie reiner

Hi Kay

I can have a read and give you some feedback: barbara111875@yahoo.co.uk
Send it to my email and I will get back to you
Cheers
Nathalie

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Alex Ayling

4 months ago - Alex Ayling

Hi Kai,

If you want some feedback can give this a read, send it to my e-mail alexayling@hotmail.com.

Best,

Alex

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Nikolay Malakhov

4 months ago - Nikolay Malakhov

Hi Kai! I myself am working on a script and dealing with similar concerns where I have a cast of supporting characters and want to ensure they have personalities and individual motivations, and that it comes across for the readers of the script and viewers of the film. I understand the struggle.


Send me the script, I’ll share my feedback and potential suggestions nk.f17m@gmail.com

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NICHOLAS PROSSER

4 months ago - NICHOLAS PROSSER

Hello Kai,
Though I am now retired, I am quite happy to read your script. Apart from directing teelvision drama series and serials for 25 years with 400+ broadcast credits (+ some producing), ,more recently, I wrote short drama film screenplays with 2 produced, which I directed. Just send your script to me. My e-mail is nicholas.prosser@gmail.com

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Claire S-B

4 months ago - Claire S-B

I’m happy to look over this! Message me and I’ll send you my email x

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Leszek Mozga

3 months, 4 weeks ago - Leszek Mozga

Hey,

happy to read it and give you feedback
leszek.mozga@gmail.com

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sevinc üçok

3 months, 3 weeks ago - sevinc üçok

Hey Kay, I am an actor with solid understanding on character work, happy to read and reflect back on the female character if you'd like another P.O.V. Cheers

sevincucok@gmail.com
Sevinç

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Peter Spencer

3 months, 1 week ago - Peter Spencer

Hi, I only saw this today. I'd be happy to help. Email info@petespencer.tv

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Mike Sheer

3 weeks, 1 day ago - Mike Sheer

Hello Kai! If you're still looking for someone to read please get in touch - there's info about what I can offer your script, and testimonials, here: https://www.mikesheer.net/script-editor

Cheers!

Mike

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