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9 years, 8 months ago - brian smith

erm here's a suggestion, using what you've written. this is not something I would do, what I do is different, but this is my take on it. the govt, fictional, took bribes for the mining co. they shouldn't really have done that. the mining co pays no tax. the land was not for the govt to give rights to the private mining co. the journalists find out. they then become more interested in the corruption of the govt and the mining co. through subsidiaries the govt has interests in the mining co, which is like insider trading. the journalists think they can exploit the situation to make a name for themselves as journalists. But the miners find out. they approach the journalists and ask who's side are you on. one of the miners then says are you trying to use us to make a name for yourselves. because if that's the case you be warned to keep off the site. the journalists then explain that the govt is taking bribes to keep the mining Co from paying taxes. one of the miners is a 5th columnist. he's being paid to report back to the Corporation. he also reports back to the govt, but doesn't always say the same thing to both parties. he's trying to exploit the situation as well. the miners decide to hold a meeting. they decide the conditions aren't worth it and want to form a co-operative. so they start talking about holding a vote. there's a pit collapse miners are injured. the miners say this was bound to happen due to lack of safety measures imposed by the corporation. the corporation complains about costs to have safety measures. but the miners insist they would do it themselves they have the knowledge and would use their own money. all the time the journalists are gathering information about the conditions and the involvement of the govt and the corporation not paying taxes on profits and no safety measures even though the miners said they would do it out of their own free time and money. the informant is actually a govt agent, who just appeared from nowhere and never worked as a miner but had been there unnoticed then suddenly starts making noises about how he will talk to the corporation and the govt. so the miners trust him to start with. the miners begin to suspect someone is informing on them because they're always getting caught out before they can do anything. the corporation are always one step ahead. and it's always after their representative has been talking with the corporation. he's also in collusion with the govt. so he's telling the govt what the corporation is doing as well, the Company thinks he's playing fair, but he's not. his real interest is the govt's control over the land and the company.
unbeknownst to the company the govt intends to introduce a tax on the company so if they do get caught it doesn't look that bad. so try give themselves some semblance of redemption, it's not based on altruism it's based on greed. but it will look like that. (right for the time being that's it. I've got addison's disease and T1 diabetes the medicines I take are antagonistic to each other. I get tired easy. And I'll come back to this ok.) (If you can use this or don't want to, ok. ) (It was a good suggestion and I worked it through further.) (I'll come back on and check fr messages.) (you can think of an idea but getting the script down is so fing hard, lol.) (That might sound a bit extreme but it is hard to translate from idea to script. It doesn't always work out the same.)

9 years, 8 months ago - Daniel Weinberger

dear brian, thanks for you thought. your outline reminded me of the d. hammet book Red harvest, a very much my favourite. sure it's a possible angle, but it's very different from mine that is based on the real events of that gold rush (and it's parallel to our contemporary western society). however, i appreciated your message, thanks again, good luck with everything and who knows maybe we'll meet up somewhere, it's a small world :) KR daniel w